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    dots Submission Name: The Night Wolfdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 191
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    dotsThe Night Wolfdots
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    Mountain mist behind those characterized eyes of pure diamond:
    Sparkling. Socketed into pure gold, in the sky beyond the everyday
    to escape the restraints of this perfect vision, idealistic vigor running short.
    Faith in selfish dreams of life beyond, beyond the everyday.
    Take back your place in the nighttime scene; you used to be so popular,
    your chest hanging out, you dance and you can’t see
    The way the people look at you, hungry and entranced.
    There’s beauty in the way she moves, spoken true by her very lips.
    I feel your breath with the morning calm on the quiet days,
    the days where gravity beats us fragile few into the blacktop parking lot
    of suppressive outdoor shopping malls, abandoned when times went south
    and the days of the home grown Revolutionary American are long gone.
    Common comforts are such a fuel to live and die by,
    You sway with the wind blow of the dollar sign eyesight satellite,
    The ricochet of the flash bang hand grenade we thought was a camera.
    The catalyst of love for life is supplemental herbs and a strong heart and will,
    It’s not about escaping, its about embracing, and entrusting, and lusting for you.
    Like satellites we spin on axis’s we sedated few created,
    For loving is effortless but love is the labor of the gods.
    My Aphrodite is a thing of tantalizing fantasy,
    Sexually permissive in the most flamboyant of ways, to me
    The sole apple of her eye. So unrealistically I do hope
    That when we passionate two come together, we spontaneously combust
    Into a brilliant cascading meteor shower of painted pleasure,
    Magnificent, lets all just tug at my heart strings.




    Submitted on 2008-09-04 16:58:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "...So unrealistically I do hope
    That when we passionate two come together, we spontaneously combust..."

    Brilliant.

    Sometimes James, I don't really understand what you are trying to get at.

    But sometimes, the way you put words together astounds me, turns me up on my head.

    Those instances are the reason I love reading your work.

    For the sake of all things holy, keep them coming!

    Love,
    Keegan.
    | Posted on 2008-09-27 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]


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