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    dots Submission Name: She Was My Runawaydots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    You can only be what your arms can reach: Reality.
    Hopes and dreams of the thickest fiction and strongest diction,
    they don’t mean a thing out on the everyday corners,
    the havenless city streets of a meet and greet culture,
    under a distracting nighttime light display, burning both ends.
    Keep your boots planted firm on mother earth,
    Nature’s harmonious discourse keeping you grounded,
    Mind in tune with the melody of the inside out.
    Precious and so illustrious, a daylight gleam on ivory,
    Like the sweet voiced displeasure of wanting and not having:
    An uncanny serenity, its something Ive needed ever since I breathed her air.
    I never could forget her.
    Embraced inequality, its life, and we live it every day:
    Faceless, but so tastefully R-rated that I couldn’t look away.
    Too tired to go another night without you stapled to my side,
    Take my heart, and carve out a special place for me next to you,
    Above the ribs, a small nip tuck behind your chest cavity of altruistic intentions.
    I’ll sit idly by, while you tug the strings and play your games with me,
    Because in the end, eyes closed, so dreamily, I can only think of you.




    Submitted on 2008-09-04 19:03:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel like I should comment but I seriously can't think of how to put my thoughts into words. Your poem has left me speechless and mindblanked
    | Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]
      In the beginning, up until the end, you kept the passion in your words, and it's so amazing because I feel as if the beginning of it should be soulless, but it feels like it's full of life. I'd say the beginning and the ending are contradictory, but they aren't. It's more like a transition from atheism to belief, and the only thing that helped you through the entire transition was love. Honestly, I don't have much else to say about this, but I love good venting poems, although I don't know why you called this venting because it's so passionate. At the end, though, it seemed like you love dreams though because it's the only thing that connects you to the one you love. This was really lovely, though.
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2008-09-05 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful. I hate constantly praising writers and not being of any help to them, but really. It is nice , sometimes, to live in a world inside your mind, specially when things are not going your way in reality. Love is something that can be very difficult to experience in a surreal world, and problems associated with it, very difficult to hide from. Brilliantly conveyed. Favourite thing was the three different .. um.. parts. Particularly how you addressed the person directly in the end. Last bit was like.. wow. Speechless.
    Least expressive part (in comparison) was probably this (and a typo somewhere in between there :
    "they don’t mean a thing out on the everyday corners,
    the havenless city streets of a meet and greet culture,
    under a distracting nighttime light display,
    burning both ends."

    Thanks for linking this to me. Enjoyed much, again.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2008-09-04 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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