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    dots Submission Name: What is the difference, My Dear?dots
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    Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
    ASL Info:    22/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46/119/104
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWhat is the difference, My Dear?dots
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    Ugh,
    What a mess.
    Just look at this place!
    Red splatter stains the newly painted walls
    And the carpeting—
    I dread to see it.

    Now you must clean,
    You stupid girl.
    How could you mistaken something so lethal
    With something so whimsical?

    Nothing can be mistaken,
    She says from beyond—
    A weapon loaded with metal
    And a chance for love failed.
    To me,
    She continues,
    Are as one.

    You pathetic little twit,
    Love does embrace you,
    Yet you confuse her with a fairy tale—
    A web of deception,
    Illusion—
    How could one compare death to life?
    They are not the same.

    Nor are they different,
    She responds.
    I’d rather be at peace knowing that I was loved once,
    Than prosper knowing that I was never at all.




    Submitted on 2008-09-05 00:24:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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