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What is the difference, My Dear?

Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
ASL Info:    22/f/PA
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46 /119 /104
Words: 137
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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What is the difference, My Dear?

What a mess.
Just look at this place!
Red splatter stains the newly painted walls
And the carpeting—
I dread to see it.

Now you must clean,
You stupid girl.
How could you mistaken something so lethal
With something so whimsical?

Nothing can be mistaken,
She says from beyond—
A weapon loaded with metal
And a chance for love failed.
To me,
She continues,
Are as one.

You pathetic little twit,
Love does embrace you,
Yet you confuse her with a fairy tale—
A web of deception,
How could one compare death to life?
They are not the same.

Nor are they different,
She responds.
I’d rather be at peace knowing that I was loved once,
Than prosper knowing that I was never at all.

Submitted on 2008-09-05 00:24:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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