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    dots Submission Name: Just a minute longer...dots

    Author: Oli
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206/211/53
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    (not about a personal experience. just what came out of my head.)

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    dotsJust a minute longer...dots

    Empty cups sit in the sink
    Liquid long since dried
    The sun is up
    But she is not

    Blankets wrapped around tight
    heat burning through her pours
    Silence curls around her ears
    Making it impossible to sleep

    Time has stood still
    for God knows how long
    waiting for her to move
    but she refuses

    Her bladder screams
    her stomach churns
    an odor laughs at her nose
    the mattress has formed to her curves

    The air, stale as it is
    has become angry
    at this pathetic being
    It lay heavy on her chest

    Her eyes close
    irritated dry
    she will stay
    just a minute longer...

    Submitted on 2008-09-05 18:05:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is just such a vivid depiction of how hard it is to get up in the morning sometimes and I love it.. I know I have spent many a morning dreading having to leave my bed and greet the world with all its chaos and drama, but somehow it always happens even when I wish for it not to..
    Beautiful images painted well with your chosen words that dance through this piece majestically..

    May the goddess keep you safe,

    Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-09-05 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]

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