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Just a minute longer...

Author: Oli
ASL Info:    23/F
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Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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(not about a personal experience. just what came out of my head.)

Just a minute longer...

Empty cups sit in the sink
Liquid long since dried
The sun is up
But she is not

Blankets wrapped around tight
heat burning through her pours
Silence curls around her ears
Making it impossible to sleep

Time has stood still
for God knows how long
waiting for her to move
but she refuses

Her bladder screams
her stomach churns
an odor laughs at her nose
the mattress has formed to her curves

The air, stale as it is
has become angry
at this pathetic being
It lay heavy on her chest

Her eyes close
irritated dry
she will stay
just a minute longer...

Submitted on 2008-09-05 18:05:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is just such a vivid depiction of how hard it is to get up in the morning sometimes and I love it.. I know I have spent many a morning dreading having to leave my bed and greet the world with all its chaos and drama, but somehow it always happens even when I wish for it not to..
Beautiful images painted well with your chosen words that dance through this piece majestically..

May the goddess keep you safe,

Tiffany aka Maskannai
| Posted on 2008-09-05 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]

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