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    dots Submission Name: I should start with the bed.dots
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    Author: PryncessVynom
    ASL Info:    23/F/WV!!
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 1001/1073/242
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsI should start with the bed.dots
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    It's an old bed, white with thin blue stripes. Every six inches or so theres a blue button that has two white stripes on it. Its thin and lumpy but I've had it for years.
    My mom calls it a prison mattress, because of the filling; which is gray with multi colored dots in it. I'm inclined to believe her.
    It sits on a wooden frame, with three drawers built into the bottom. I used to keep all my clothes in there but haven't been able to open them in years.As I was watching the blood pool into the button dimples I wondered how much I could bleed before it started to hurt the baby.




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      not sure where this is going to go. hope it's not autobiographical. you've got an intriguing start; keep going with this.

    peace,

    joe
    | Posted on 2008-09-08 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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