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    dots Submission Name: My heartbeatdots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMy heartbeatdots
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    No heart beat can match the one of mine when you hold me
    Faster and faster my pulse flies wild as your arms snake closer
    No heart beat can match mine when you look at me
    Staring into your eyes I sink deeper into our perfect heaven
    No heart beat can match mine when you kiss my lips
    Feeling my head rush and my knees shake I know
    that we're meant for eachother...
    or so I thought....

    No heart beat can match the one of mine when I see you
    A slow, dead thump claims the hollow hole within my chest
    No heart beat can match mine as your arms snake close to her
    A glimpse of what we were and what we should've been
    No heart beat can match mine...
    the dead, silent,
    stillness within....




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