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    dots Submission Name: Cherry Alcoholdots
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    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       sometimes I feel like i dun have a partner, sometimes i feel like my only friend is the city I live in, the city of angels. lonely as I am, together we cry.
    -redhotchilipeppers.
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    dotsCherry Alcoholdots
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    Old enough to live on your own,
    But too young to care.
    If people were smart they woulda kicked you out;
    But their heads are up in the air.
    Too busy!
    Sniffin’ the cotton breezes --
    circulating everywhere.

    “Hard times are some of the best times.”
    Or so I’ve heard somewhere,
    You can try but -
    Luck always has a factor in getting you there.
    You know what they say though:
    Gotta keep on tryin’, no givin’ up…

    It smells better than it tastes,
    Not what I envisioned at all.
    It tastes like,
    cherry alcohol.
    Oh well, maybe it’ll help me fall asleep
    On time, on time, on time…




    Submitted on 2008-09-06 05:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it. the rhythm and flow are just right and you don't rhyme too much. pretty good.
    | Posted on 2008-09-07 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, thanks.
    You want my honest opinon, it's the weirdest thing I ever wrote.
    | Posted on 2008-09-07 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      It's different, at the very least. I quite liked the 'it smells better than it tastes' line. Quite cynical and down to earth. Nice poem.

    MSS
    | Posted on 2008-09-06 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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