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Cherry Alcohol

Author: Mieko
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sometimes I feel like i dun have a partner, sometimes i feel like my only friend is the city I live in, the city of angels. lonely as I am, together we cry.
<3 Kelsea

Cherry Alcohol

Old enough to live on your own,
But too young to care.
If people were smart they woulda kicked you out;
But their heads are up in the air.
Too busy!
Sniffin’ the cotton breezes --
circulating everywhere.

“Hard times are some of the best times.”
Or so I’ve heard somewhere,
You can try but -
Luck always has a factor in getting you there.
You know what they say though:
Gotta keep on tryin’, no givin’ up…

It smells better than it tastes,
Not what I envisioned at all.
It tastes like,
cherry alcohol.
Oh well, maybe it’ll help me fall asleep
On time, on time, on time…

Submitted on 2008-09-06 05:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like it. the rhythm and flow are just right and you don't rhyme too much. pretty good.
| Posted on 2008-09-07 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah, thanks.
You want my honest opinon, it's the weirdest thing I ever wrote.
| Posted on 2008-09-07 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
  It's different, at the very least. I quite liked the 'it smells better than it tastes' line. Quite cynical and down to earth. Nice poem.

| Posted on 2008-09-06 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]

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