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Take. Keep. Please.


Author: Oli
ASL Info:    23/F
Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206 /211 /53
Words: 307
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Description:

Abut a friend...


Take. Keep. Please.


Fall

     hard

            break

                     cry

                Sit

       stand

try

    with thoughts of destruction



Fall 

     harder

               shatter

                           close

                   stay

          down 

longer

          faith slipping as the days pass



  I 

      give

              you 

                     my

                           heart

                    take.

           keep.

please.

            Never whole again.




Submitted on 2008-09-07 18:15:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like the idea that love is an up down staircase as your format implies. I guess such would be the case if one started to 'cry' on the first set of stairs. Then started to 'close ' on second set and gave one's self away at 'heart' on third set.
| Posted on 2008-09-08 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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