I really like the comparison on how your past experiences make you feel. I get exactly what you mean too, even though I'm a guy I've been in that position. Now the writing is pretty good, not perfect by any means but hell, who's writing is these days? I'm not a fan of rhyming even though it makes a lot of things sound good and I didn't think the last stanza sounded good. probably the words 'flesh' and 'sex' that did it to me. Other than that, nice job.
i wrote a poem similar to this
its called love and blood lust
you should read it
it takes a totally different direction from yours
yours seems to emphasize him more that the cutting
and it is left open because it doesn't say anything about how he feels about her
it just makes me think she will die
was that your intention because i love it im going to add it to my favorites
You know, I totally had the wrong idea for some time will reading this. I will say this is a pretty good write. She gets pleasure from pain, or at least the pain from cutting herself. Perhaps it makes her feel alive. Still strange though, at any rate good job and I will be checking back on you for more work.
Submission Name: Perfection: Slender, Silver, Sharp
