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Music


Author: Oli
ASL Info:    23/F
Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206 /211 /53
Words: 23
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Sometimes I wish life had it's own soundtrack.


Music



It takes me
I'm gone
leave me alone
the rhyme makes me smile
gone
I'm gone
talk to me in a minute




Submitted on 2008-09-07 19:50:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A good assay of listening to music,but I think the song or interlude did not do music justice if it is only a minute long. (as the last line says.)
If last twowords in last line were just an hypernated expression they should be in quotes (which says that which it is not).

Enjoyed the read.
| Posted on 2008-09-08 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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