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    dots Submission Name: in these words are lies and convictions.dots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1260



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    dotsin these words are lies and convictions.dots
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    the days are evil
    so i sleep them all away
    and i hear music has long
    lost it's healing taste
    so iíve given up on listening
    and just for good measure
    put out both my hollow eyes
    if hope has died then i pray for revival

    oh, fragile believer
    put your faith in the sky
    staring at the ocean
    will only leave you grounded here
    i swear thereís more,
    i swear, i think, i am so sure

    idle hands are dangerous
    so i keep them close by
    and i saw forgiveness fade to
    just another passer-by
    now iíve given up on breathing
    just to be a brief example
    of what weíve all become
    if this is how you want to live i pray for revival

    oh, fragile believer
    put your faith in the sky
    staring at the ocean
    will only leave you grounded here
    i swear thereís more,
    i swear, i think, i am so sure

    i swear thereís more,
    i swear, i think, i am so sure

    i swear thereís so much more,
    i swear, i think, i have never been this sure

    come down, revival,
    while a breath still remains

    come down revival,




    Submitted on 2008-09-07 23:17:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It took some faniggaling of words to write this one. Its story is universal in its tryst to convince that there is more of the show to come.
    i think if you would add three more lines to the end it would sound more urgent, eig.,
    Come down,
    Come down,
    Come down.
    | Posted on 2008-09-08 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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