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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTimedots
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    There are no clocks around me
    But time ticks ever closely
    A second less to my last breath
    A time where i'll have nothing left
    It watches me every moment I'm awake
    and when i sleep it reminds me of my mistake
    I can't control it but what i do follows it forward
    Still fighting with a word still fight with a sword
    Thought I grow tired toward the end
    With what life I have left I still defend
    Sometimes I sit and wait as it creeps upon me slowly
    Knowing that it leaves me oh so lonely
    but as i awake to my each day
    I search for someone to give just a peace of myself away
    I know that the time is the enemy
    But knowing it is my only remedy




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      OMG this is going straight to my Favs List well written and wow i can understand exacty what you are saying in this piece well done it has struck a chord with me i love the way you write and express yourself

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