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    dots Submission Name: Just For Youdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 99/55/48
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsJust For Youdots
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    My wings are on fire
    as I am falling over
    to the bottom of the sea
    I can no longer save you
    drowning over and over again
    my lungs colasping, theres no breathing
    and yet
    I can still see you

    Still...

    Your the reason that I am living
    You the reason why, I am crawling out
    the only name that I want to shout
    Your wispers keep my heart beating
    with a thousand words
    I am still fighting

    I am fighting just for you

    Sinking deeper
    This world pulls me under
    I have to deny my self to defy my self
    Turning aside everything
    What they want me to be
    What they want me to see

    But I can still hear you

    And I can't take it
    When you lay there dieing
    Bound by emptyness
    and your still crying
    Theres nothing you can do
    I'm still here for you

    Theres nothing that I can't do
    When I still can save you




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