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    dots Submission Name: Cha-Cha-Chadots
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    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 77/147/87
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 833
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       dun nuh nuh, feedback pls


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    dotsCha-Cha-Chadots
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    Cha-Cha-Changin' tha story up on me!

    Nope!
    Not gonna happen,
    no not again!

    What's this?
    You've got me pinned now, anyhow.
    Knee's on arms are weighin' me down.

    I can't take this, who says you're allowed!
    To order me around!?

    Pouty lipped, dark complected
    girl sitting on the ground
    she said, 'i'm all that's left
    of this sad sorry town.'

    Pouty lipped, dark complected
    girl sitting on the ground,
    I hear no sound, really
    There's no people around?

    "They all burned alive
    I heard them cry, so loud
    It hurt just to hear them
    just before they burned up &dissapeared"

    Pouty lipped, dark complected
    girl sitting on the ground,
    You've been crowned..
    queen of this mess
    of all that's left.

    Ash, and us.




    Submitted on 2008-09-08 17:56:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      me too. and not at all. silly too. apoe
    | Posted on 2008-09-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya ya man you write songs? Cause this would be a good one. Can you explain what you meant in this poem? I know its probably a great thing but i can't see it. I like the style. Is it a crime to like the way the words are used but not to understand the message underneath? If so this is probably an insult and i apologize. But i like it.

    Real chill flow
    Wordyb
    | Posted on 2008-09-08 00:00:00 | by wordyb | [ Reply to This ]


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