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    dots Submission Name: The Secrets of Culicidaedots
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    Author: Sheakhan
    ASL Info:    25/M/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 175/197/89
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsThe Secrets of Culicidaedots
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    Time spent beneath the willow, observing
    tiny exoskeletal creatures in flight
    might not be the best way of aquainting
    oneself with them all, but it feels right.

    The purr of a thousand little cellophane
    wings buffeting the air in a most microscopic
    way is intoxicating to close your eyes and
    listen to, like a waterfall, microcosmic.

    Watching the lives of those too short
    to feel much in the way of pain, or suffer
    a heartbreak, or loss such as those we might
    endure, it's only logical we are their supper.

    They must crave that emotional experience
    and syphon it out of us in order to assimilate.
    Their tiny straw mouths more vessels for
    absorbing feelings than an attempt to agitate.

    Maybe blood isn't all they need to survive.




    Submitted on 2008-09-09 02:47:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i enjoy it a lot, especially the comparison of human lives and mosquito lives, and especially within that the time constraints upon both sets of lives. genius, my friend. good to see you still got it :)
    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]
      "...like a waterfall, microcosmic." <--- possibly the greatest words I've seen in a long time. Nice job, Sheak. Only you could actually make us contemplate mosquitoes. It's a beautiful poem, and it takes me to blood vessels far away from here. Unfortunately, I still hate mosquitoes. Their bites itch like crazy! Still, you astound me with your thoughts. Bzzz bzz. ~Asiaticfox
    | Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]


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