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    dots Submission Name: encased in mollusksdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsencased in mollusksdots
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    i type out the words
    in childish hastings.
    someone asks,
    "why do you tend
    towards things so tragic?"
    & i reply,
    "sometimes you look into the mirror
    & sometimes the mirror
    looks back at you."

    you take what you can get
    in reflections
    when the alternative
    is souping
    into the yellow art
    of everything.

    some looks
    really take the pounds off
    & everyone
    just keeps laughing
    as if the joke's on me.
    as if i'd tell the same one twice.
    as if anyone
    really understands themselves
    in the first person.

    i find more humor
    in the sand
    where the ocean's
    made such clever plays
    out of death.
    take myself,
    for instance,
    & my body
    decomposing into crabs.

    & my hands
    might sift through
    the fragrant glass to find you.
    our fingers will touch,
    encased in ancient mollusks
    wrapped in pearl.
    amongst the tides,
    our salty tongues
    will find eachother...
    up and down
    our bodies lost in waves.





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