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    dots Submission Name: eating the walls againdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 351
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotseating the walls againdots

    all of you,
    myself included,
    speak with lion's paws
    between our teeth
    as if we could sing to eachother
    while the world around us
    crashes through the trees.

    & i sit
    in this position
    that lets the lotus
    flower from my chest
    as i watch
    from the inside,
    where it counts,
    as my heart
    searches itself
    for signs of cracking.

    i've pearled into the moss
    a little longer
    than i should have.
    so much so
    that i've almost become it.
    i spell out blue,
    & yellow
    & fuchsine patinas
    onto the mirror
    of lake
    that i stare into
    each night.
    the image
    that's returned
    has more waves
    than the water.

    if i could trade
    the honey of my tongue
    for a general
    lack of compromise,
    i'd gladly spend
    the rest my life
    in the fragile arms
    of another.
    i find strength
    in fractures
    where others
    would turn away.
    i think that the greatest loves
    are the ones
    that fill & bind
    the missing places.
    i'm only
    ever eating the walls again...

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