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    dots Submission Name: eating the walls againdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 333
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotseating the walls againdots
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    all of you,
    myself included,
    speak with lion's paws
    between our teeth
    as if we could sing to eachother
    while the world around us
    crashes through the trees.

    & i sit
    in this position
    that lets the lotus
    flower from my chest
    as i watch
    from the inside,
    where it counts,
    as my heart
    searches itself
    for signs of cracking.

    i've pearled into the moss
    a little longer
    than i should have.
    so much so
    that i've almost become it.
    i spell out blue,
    & yellow
    & fuchsine patinas
    onto the mirror
    of lake
    that i stare into
    each night.
    the image
    that's returned
    has more waves
    than the water.

    if i could trade
    the honey of my tongue
    for a general
    lack of compromise,
    i'd gladly spend
    the rest my life
    shrouded
    in the fragile arms
    of another.
    i find strength
    in fractures
    where others
    would turn away.
    i think that the greatest loves
    are the ones
    that fill & bind
    the missing places.
    i'm only
    ever eating the walls again...




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