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first kiss just once please

Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
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a kiss poem cause i got my first kiss from my bf the other day

first kiss just once please

if there was a moment more perfect for us it would be our first kiss. the sparks to fly between out lips & to know were perfect for each other

to know our destiny our love meant to be and all our time together meaning something

but the only way we'll know and to prove were all we need

just favor me
a kiss

Submitted on 2008-09-09 15:12:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ah sweet memories for me too but there will be more to come
as you grow up
this made me so happy for you
| Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  sweet write. nicely done, not too 'eck', ya know?
| Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
   This is very sweet, I will never forget my first kiss, That spark between us. On reading this, how do I long to be 14 once again.

Just a heads up for grammar, I'm not the one for giving points, as English is not my first language, but it gets a little weird to follow.

Cool write.
| Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]

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