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Thank you for your lies

Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 49
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Thank you for your lies

you stabbed my heart
you turned your back
you lied strait to my face

You let your lies
consume my trust
and spit on the ground

you made me scream
you made me cry
and all I can say is

Thanks for the lies

Submitted on 2008-09-09 15:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i hate people who lie... it really annoys me..
i think u've captured the emotion perfectly in this poem.

you've got one spelling error... but apart from that its perfect

| Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
  training is such a pitch . poe
| Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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