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sickness


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 55
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I heard this story of a raper in a book i read and this just happened


sickness



my spiraling sickness
my hurt for love
it turns my heart to black

the pain I bring
the tears I cause
and the lives I ruin

only sadness
only hurt
and evil bleakness

I have to die
the end is near
and all i can say is

I'm sorry




Submitted on 2008-09-09 15:31:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  not bad, not good. poe
| Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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