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    dots Submission Name: The London Transport System Is A Joke dots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 800
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1294



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    The London Transport System Is A Joke


    I tried to get from A to B
    I didn’t expect the trouble directed at me
    “what do you mean my oyster has gone under?
    I’m under 18, it should be free!”
    Oh the hassle to get from A to B
    I dare not tell the bus conductor
    That I wanted to get to D
    “no I wont pay your two pound”
    “well sir, you could always get the underground
    Or walk to London town?”
    Push me off the bus
    I didn’t want to cause a fuss
    But now I’ve taken the bus number
    Your supervisor will be getting my letter
    And you can get a transfer

    The London transport system does stand up
    But I still cant sit down
    I still cant sit down

    I tried to get from A to B
    The bus driver went mental on me
    “that oyster is no good, the picture is faint!”
    “its not my fault, I was made to walk in the rain”
    Oh the hassle to get from A to B
    I might have to make a complaint
    “I still wont pay this fare”
    “well walk out the door and stay right there!”
    Pushed off the bus
    Time to cause a fuss
    I’ve taken his home address
    And we could talk about it
    Over a game of chess.




    Submitted on 2008-09-09 16:30:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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