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    dots Submission Name: Lonely placedots
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    Author: Lilyan
    ASL Info:    1 Elite Years
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 42/38/26
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Misc/Nature
    Total Views: 149
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 538



    Description:
       These thoughts came from the weather.


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    dotsLonely placedots
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    The voice
    of coal black raven
    abandoned
    sad-sad farm
    dying
    old high oak
    and steps
    on soft brown mud.
    Only wind
    sings quietly
    only long grass
    dances there
    but in the lonely
    quiet place
    much more is
    in deep inside.
    Because sometimes
    the warm autumn sun
    shows some
    yellow bright rays
    and sometimes
    the blue sky still
    blushes shyly
    to this lonely place.





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      How peaceful this is. I feel I'd like to walk around this place and enjoy the solitude. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2009-08-18 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]


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