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    dots Submission Name: A devils broken heart.dots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA devils broken heart.dots
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    The words were like a beat against the devils breast,
    a shard in the heart of a ravaged, wounded, beast.
    The love they carried like a swooning summer breeze,
    a Heavens night without a shadow of a star.
    The words fell upon my heart.
    Whispering a hallows eve of one night frivolities.
    A deep regret long,
    but forgot.
    And they sung softly,
    Whispering an Angels gift;
    ĎIf you do ever leave,
    my heart shall follow,
    my heart always yours.
    If you shall ever pass,
    my soul shall pass as well
    always yours.
    If you shall ever turn away,
    my eyes shall lack their sight,
    for nothing will be left to see.
    So away with you.
    Away with you
    the words that curse me bound.
    Away with you;
    the words of a devils broken heart.í
    The words were like an echo, as my lips fell part.
    The words a son, a tremble, sparing my moonless sky a star




    Submitted on 2008-09-09 18:05:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this makes my heart cry at the beauty of it i look forward to reading more of your poetry
    | Posted on 2008-09-19 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Understanding a thought is as tough as thinking about it... Applause for your style and process of thought...
    i am no great poet but i admire this style of writing...
    thank you for the knowledge...
    hope to read more of your thoughts
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    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by ssmakx | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, get back to me if want my help, to be a great poet and finish your instructions..? poe


    My words are beats against this devils breast,
    shards in the heart of a ravaged, wounded, beast.
    What love carried on a swooning summerís breeze,
    on a hallowed night without shadows of stars or fear,
    words fell upon my heart whispering itís hallows eve.

    One night of frivolities of deep regret, less I long forget
    they sung softly in whispers at the moon, this angels gift;
    | Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful, Ira!
    | Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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