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    dots Submission Name: So Deep In Lovedots

    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSo Deep In Lovedots

    He looks out on the ocean deep
    So far beyond the blue
    His mind remembers yesterday
    Of a love so pure and true
    Of when she stole his heart away
    When they met upon the lea
    For the first in his weary life
    So deep in love was he

    He longs to hold her tight once more
    Like he did so long ago
    And wallow in her every charm
    That set his heart aglow
    To lose himself forevermore
    For all eternity
    As the ocean sings a silent song
    So deep in love is he

    He dreams of times perhaps to come
    When they will be as one
    Looking out across the waves
    To view the setting sun
    He whispers soft a prayer of hope
    That one day he will see
    The girl that makes him realise
    So deep in love is he

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      Great poem this, it brought back memories of back home in the UK for me, nicely worded, clear and crisp, so nice to have such work on the site.
    well done.

    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]
      Outstanding! Just an absolutely perfect love poem, with a love remembrance, the sea, and a marvelous love story! I struggle sometimes to find proper words to compliment your outstanding work, as I don't want to sound redundant.

    This is really excellent!
    | Posted on 2008-09-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      aww... this is really nice...i love it.. its never easy losing anyone...

    | Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so beautiful. i loved it, i could see the poem as if i was looking at a painting. it told a sad tale of a loss yet you had to read to the end to see his outcome. this was really good. Joanna
    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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