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The rose

Author: Polydectes
ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
Elite Ratio:    7.84 - 154 /85 /38
Words: 28
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The rose

Tiny rose,
thy garden's den.
How wary I,
should be then.

Every time,
should I hold you.
Keep an eye out,
for the stem.

Submitted on 2008-09-10 09:28:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love the idea of concise writing. I love your foundation of a rose. I think it needs some tweaking so it doesn't stray into the everyday idea of a rose in thorn. Very Keats, and beautiful
| Posted on 2011-04-07 00:00:00 | by queendepricate | [ Reply to This ]
  Ha well you are back this is certain. Quite intriguing Rose you painted here. a Rose to desire perhaps and mind the stem that support the tiny rose. It just may be a little more difficult than thought to get the rose from the garden den.

As I have said - this proves you are here again. Well Done Johan. Stay well. Joachim
| Posted on 2011-03-30 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
  the rose fools...the stems have thorns...once we get sucked in...we get cut, deeper with each love.

wow, cool poem here.."garden's" ?

really like the effect from such concise wording.

| Posted on 2011-03-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  When gardening, you should consider - "every rose has its thorn"
and you should remember to wear your gloves and pack along a set of garden shears, just in case that flower gets fiesty...

no, maybe not.

This piece is about being wary of some one who has caught yr eye, captured yr interest. But are you going to trust this rose?

suspicion is a common thing for people who have been stabbed once before.

it was a concise and well written poem.

hope the gardening goes well.

| Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
  that made a lot of sense i liked it. i love it
| Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by truefruit06 | [ Reply to This ]

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