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    dots Submission Name: DayDreams (Ft. TheStillSilence)dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsDayDreams (Ft. TheStillSilence)dots
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    AeThe Lost Poet)

    She's my muse--
    Oops I mean my favorite....
    Who'd expect the blessed again
    To ever mean the greatest,
    Face it, she's lucid--
    and I am shady,
    She's the type of lady,
    that drive men crazy,
    and lately,
    I've been having late nights
    Spaced out in place,
    like i'm in stage fright,
    it ain't right, is it?
    Ah... no....
    Got me giving charity,
    Like i'm Bono,

    Losing my clarity,
    Yes, I'm in very deep,
    With the most sincerity,
    Yes, I'm in very deep.

    (TheStillSilence)

    And so she dances on my lips
    With eyelids close; I grab her hips
    And on we go;
    Into the wind
    That chases dreams but calls us sin.

    The beat she keeps,
    But with blistered feet.
    A tempting dance, and bigger feat: as winds take hold of me;
    I sway into
    Storms and temptations.
    Her melody shines and breaks me through,
    She coos: "tired souls have revelations."
    And on we go into seas of blue.

    And we're both in very deep.




    Submitted on 2008-09-10 11:58:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First part and second part don't mix that well.
    The first one does sound like a guy daydreaming to himself about this girl he likes.
    The second part eluded to something much more intimate, and, it dosen't feel like they connect very well which distracted a little from maybe your entire point.
    You know?
    Are they supposed to?
    Or are they the same 'idea' represented differantly?
    I'm curious now...
    | Posted on 2008-09-15 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]


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