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    dots Submission Name: global warming gives me wooddots
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    Author: milo stills
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    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsglobal warming gives me wooddots
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    Right now you cannot look me in the eyes
    The sea is rising inside my skull,
    My skin is changing color

    The beginning of the end is a wink and a smile

    I want you too know that the world can never die
    An ending is much a like a beginning
    Even if you are always cold,

    Even if oceans are boiling over

    My words come from now where
    Condensation on a glass of water
    I am refueling through the hole in my head

    The sea is rising.




    Submitted on 2008-09-10 12:16:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The beginning of the end is a wink and a smile

    wonderful metaphor. i think the title attracted me alot to your post, because that gave me the impression that there was something about the rising of the tides that excited you, almost as if to say that you get off on climate changes and polar ice caps melting. not to sound like a [censored]er or anything, but i wanted funny. it was blunt and blunt is good when you speak on things of great universal value, especially in terms of the planet drowing in its own grave when the hurricane finally decies to hit. :) good work
    | Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]


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