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Fallen Angel


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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just a poem i'm really confused on my beliefs


Fallen Angel



The falling angel
has been struck down
feathers falling off.
as well as tears

he speaks of love
and speaks of hate
and was cast out
of the so called golden city

is it really gold
or maybe black
can't be fun
with so many rules

and so many rules
this angel "broke"
but its always sad
to see a fallen angel




Submitted on 2008-09-10 15:01:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i read one of your other poems so i dicided to check out more. this one was ok i lkied it- butand so many rules
this angel "broke"
but its always sad
to see a fallen angel
was intence, it totally threw me off wasnt expecting that great end to it....
i lkie your stuff indivitually, but it seems as if you have the same like rythem, style, and construction in all of them. there good, but try mixin it up a bit some time
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Gwenith Louise | [ Reply to This ]


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