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    dots Submission Name: Fallen Angeldots

    Author: truefruit06
    ASL Info:    14/m/IN
    Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6/22/44
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       just a poem i'm really confused on my beliefs

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    dotsFallen Angeldots

    The falling angel
    has been struck down
    feathers falling off.
    as well as tears

    he speaks of love
    and speaks of hate
    and was cast out
    of the so called golden city

    is it really gold
    or maybe black
    can't be fun
    with so many rules

    and so many rules
    this angel "broke"
    but its always sad
    to see a fallen angel

    Submitted on 2008-09-10 15:01:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i read one of your other poems so i dicided to check out more. this one was ok i lkied it- butand so many rules
    this angel "broke"
    but its always sad
    to see a fallen angel
    was intence, it totally threw me off wasnt expecting that great end to it....
    i lkie your stuff indivitually, but it seems as if you have the same like rythem, style, and construction in all of them. there good, but try mixin it up a bit some time
    | Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Gwenith Louise | [ Reply to This ]

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