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to turn the knife


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 39
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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Description:

goes out to my ex friends


to turn the knife


to have the knife
turned through his back
and I was the one
with the knife through

the pain felt
and the blood lost
only to a real enemy
supposedly a friend
and i was fooled




Submitted on 2008-09-10 15:17:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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