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to far to distant memories


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 65
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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i don't know why i wrote this but i did enjoy it i hope you do to


to far to distant memories



of true death and lies
make up the sickening truth
of haterd which powers
thoses whos souls are controlled

but the only way to get past the evil
and to see the light
is to remember sad times
and the distant memories of joy

but no true way to love life or
to hate it
the real way is to decide




Submitted on 2008-09-10 15:24:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This reminds me of the things I would write when I was your age. I would assume then that you write the same way I did also. If so I tell you to trust in the process, keep letting inspiration flow freely without forcing it out. What is good in raw talent now will start to come out as if it was crafted with skill. Trust in the power of simple words and raw emotion and you will only get better.
| Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]


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