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    dots Submission Name: Amazementdots
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    Author: Druecilla
    ASL Info:    18/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.33 - 22/26/28
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 52
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 986



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    dotsAmazementdots
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    I'm standing in a pool of blood,
    Where did it come from?

    My friends all look in horror,
    I laugh. What else can I do?

    My wrists are bleeding,
    But what can I say?

    They rush out for me,
    But I pull away.

    I look at them with eyes full of hate,
    And say"Now look at what you've gone and made me do!"

    I lean against the wall,
    Falling to my knees.

    Their eyes following me,
    I cry out in sheer excitement!

    I look at my wrists,
    I look at them in amazement!

    Blood all around me I feel right at home,
    No one loves me and I feel all so alone.

    When I thought about the meaning of my life,
    I realized it was a lie!

    No real friends, no family that cared,
    Everybody pushed me away !

    Now I'm left staring at my wrists in Amazement!




    Submitted on 2008-09-10 21:54:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm... I have heard, how people cut theirselves
    to get rid of pain what they feel inside..This amazment of seeing your own blood made me suprise. When i first looked at the title i really didn't expect such writing, the writing itself amazed me ..it's such a succinct piece of writing, great i think, i like the title still.
    | Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]


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