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    dots Submission Name: Foolish storysdots

    Author: grimmreaper
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 122/43/23
    Words: 439
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       slightly inspired by the first boy I really ever liked. he played me all the way just for the pleasure of watching me hurt. He is the reason I am afriad to open up to a guy again

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    dotsFoolish storysdots

    I don't know what to tell you,
    as you stand in front of me
    with your charming smile
    and flashing eyes,
    telling me that you love me.

    You say,
    that you want me now,
    that you where wrong
    that you made a mistake.
    You say
    that you dream of me everynight
    and that you can't get me off
    your mind.

    You tell me
    that all those times
    when you harshly ignorred me
    and flashed me those cold hearted glares
    where because you where afriad
    because 'I" wouldnt talk to "you"

    I say,
    I do not love you,
    I hate you.
    YOu don't need me,
    you don't dream of me
    and you wheren't afraid of me.
    I was the one that spoke you YOU!
    Only to watch you turn your back!

    You stood there
    look me in the eye
    and told me
    that you wanted to get to know me better,
    told me that you felt somthing
    just so that I could watch you
    walk away
    to HER!

    I followed you
    only to see you
    tell 'her'
    that you loved her
    and give 'her'
    her first kiss.

    I cried my heart out for nights
    because I read the messages
    on your phone
    that you sent to her
    telling her of your future life with her,
    you told her you wanted to marry her
    spend the rest of your life with her
    start a family
    you told her,
    that she meant the world to you
    that you wanted no one else.

    You told her, YOU LOVED HER,
    and now
    you stand before me
    telling me
    that it wasn't real?!
    that you didn't mean what you told her?!

    I gave you my heart!
    Only to watch you crush it!
    And all you did,
    was stand there
    and watch me suffer,
    screaming in pain
    for some kind of relief.

    I am sorry
    that she did not accept you
    and I am sorry that it didn't work out,
    but i will NOT
    allow you
    to hurt me again.

    Just because,
    You have that flashy smile of yours
    and your funny jokes
    don't mean
    that I will fall
    for your scheming lies.

    And as you plead with me
    at my feet
    telling me that its true
    that you really do mean it this time
    that all of what had happened
    between you and her
    wasn't real
    and as you feed me your storys,
    I only shake my head
    and turn my face,
    because you don't deserve
    to see me cry.

    You don't deserve ME

    Submitted on 2008-09-11 03:03:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nicely written, true-fully it was a bit longer thank i would have preferred but nevertheless i did enjoy it! I very much enjoyed the end

    I only shake my head
    and turn my face,
    because you don't deserve
    to see me cry.

    You don't deserve ME

    "Because you don't deserve to see me cry"

    Truly a beautiful piece of work here
    | Posted on 2009-07-26 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      This was one of the best I have read on this site to date. The naked truth of your pain, confusion, and anger are something of a marvel. While I know that something this good must be (at lest somewhat) exaggerated and crafted, it still feels like raw honesty, and that makes it all the more beautiful. I will be checking out some more of your work.
    | Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]

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