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    dots Submission Name: No memory of youdots
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    Author: submarine
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 128/91/45
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       my best friend died wen i was 15 n this is the 1st ive ever written bout him. its been 7 years and this is the first time i'm actually acknowledging his death.


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    dotsNo memory of youdots
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    I remember when we first met
    All sweaty and dirty
    Playing football at school
    I didnít think youíd see me.
    But you noticed me
    The new geek in class
    U spoke to me that day
    And every day since.

    Over the years we grew closer
    Best friends we became
    Formed a bond no one understood
    A love no one would ever get.
    We shared our worlds
    And everything in it
    We stuck with each other
    No matter what happened.

    Everything was perfect
    Until tragedy hit
    A storm we never saw coming
    Destroying all we had made.
    You were gone
    Consumed by your poison
    And I was left among ruins
    With no where to go.

    I was 15 and at my first funeral
    Seeing you among the flowers
    It made me want to scream
    But I shut my eyes tight
    And not a tear I shed.
    I lost my best friend that day
    I would never see my soul mate again
    And as the preacher began to speak
    I could feel my heart break.

    The pain was too strong to bear
    I didnít think I could go on
    And as I went to bed that night
    I prayed to God to forget.
    I wanted it all gone
    The day I met you
    And every day since
    I wanted God to make me forget
    To erase the very existence of you.

    I woke up the next day
    Like it was my first day on earth
    There was no more poison
    No best friend.
    Just me and myself
    There was no pain of death
    And Iíve lived everyday until now
    With no memory of you.




    Submitted on 2008-09-11 05:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well done for finally sitting down and writing this. Very evocative and compelling in many parts.

    A lovely sentiment and tribute to your best friend.

    I am quite sure he is looking down upon you, feeling very proud indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      well i think it had a lot of meaning yet i couldn't tell whether it was a romance poem or a best friend poem or something else but it was wounderfull (actually something happened like that to me sometime ago but great job
    | Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by truefruit06 | [ Reply to This ]


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