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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 332
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 992
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1937



    Description:
       i'm back to the big ES, and its been quite some time. i miss this place and its lack of esteem for frequent contributors and members, who for lack of a better word, suck, but still tend to get all the recognition the realest might be neglected of. this is all of course oratorical diarrhea, its not healthy to let shit build up, thats how people get hemorroids.


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    why do you bother?
    iím not trying to pick the flowers while theyíre wrapped around the bullís collar
    i felt powerless, explainations fall short
    my only reply is that i was unfairly treatd as sport
    and you how that shit feels,
    know how you loose your grip of whatís real
    because some asshole didnít stick to the deal
    a falling out is just that, you fell from high
    where you think you have control of a situation
    but only not
    its not that it occupies all time and effort
    youíre just wishing it would go away
    so you can keep the sure things in life together
    but apparently, closure lies elusive
    when youíre trying as god bears witness
    to just tell the truth,
    but you canít cuz who you were is who i am
    and if who i am ainít good enough
    you wouldíve found another man way back when shit between you and my squad was tough
    its over, the storms are weathered, and now looking back on the past year
    i pray my tenureís measured up
    to whatever it may be put through, iím water tested
    in the end i guess my self-esteem isnít something someone else should be impressed with
    iím trying to pick my words wisely,
    and beg to god you donít see the shit a spit about that bitch as advertisements
    just know i love you, and though i know talk is cheap
    its over for her, letís continue to focus on the great things with you and me
    if you have a question, leave it in the suggestion box
    we can pick it up when you understand that iím happy with what i got
    through time, i waded through marsh it was awfully deep,
    if you wanna know about scars, my love
    donít talk to me
    talk is cheap
    and we both got money problems and all
    letís take this one off the list
    one less problem to solve

    i love you becc




    Submitted on 2008-09-11 23:27:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the title and I think this piece reflects moving on and being accepting of who you are - with or without.
    It flowed lyrically and with a hint of rap.

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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