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do you even know


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 59
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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i guess some friends you lose and i sure lost a lot of them... what a bunch of ass holes


do you even know



do you even know
what is hidden behind
the smile

do you even know
what its like to hurt
deeply

do you even know
what its like
when everything is gone
and your alone

does anyone even know
how it feels to be crushed
underfoot of someone you
loved

no no one ever knew




Submitted on 2008-09-12 12:41:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  cool my brother it is a nice work but i am of the opinion the poetry is an art form and like other art form it should entertain ,inspire and educate.Keep it up.
| Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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