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    dots Submission Name: Timesdots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    26/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 162/239/241
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 463
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 903



    Description:
       about nothing in particular... random thoughts that mean nothing really... well some do, others are insignificant... kind of lameage here, but whateves


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    dotsTimesdots
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    There are times,
    That I cry,
    Out at night,
    For you,

    There are times,
    Canít escape,
    This nightmare,
    I fear of you,

    There are times,
    I only wish,
    I only hope,
    You stay with me,
    Forever,

    You say you love me,
    But how can I know for sure,
    You say you want me,
    But baby please,
    Tell me more,
    Tell me more,

    Sometimes I wish,
    You were here,
    All the time,
    Hoping, just for once,
    Maybe baby, Iíd be right,

    Sometimes I pray,
    You go away,
    Just give me space,
    But when you do,
    Ooh, Iím missing you,
    Iím missing you,

    Baby, baby, do you know,
    Every day I love you more,
    Every day I wish you close,
    If only now forever,





    Submitted on 2008-09-12 13:28:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      its a nice poem i like it... the flow could be better but its still good.

    and courtney is rite u do use a lot of comma..

    kaz
    | Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      You use A LOT of commas.

    Therefore ending the shortest comment known to humankind.

    Peace, Love, and Cupcakes.

    -Your Lover
    | Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by CourtneyLynne | [ Reply to This ]


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