Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

can you see the real me. my inner beast


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 35
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
Total Views: 782
Average Vote:    4.0000
Bytes: 239



Description:




can you see the real me. my inner beast



can he see
inside of me
what hides behind my face

my inner beast
eating me
consuming my soul

if he's seen
the inner me
there would be no more

of us




Submitted on 2008-09-12 14:45:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  This was sooo good. the only feedback i could give u was that it would be nicer if it was longer. i got all caught up in it but then it ended :(
| Posted on 2008-09-13 00:00:00 | by ImmortalMayhem | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



165605