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Let you go


Author: dthforeverpain8
ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112 /217 /289
Words: 142
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
Total Views: 1073
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Its not true, Fyi... lets not start a fight over another stupid poem... just some thoughts k?


Let you go



I knew you werent right for me
but then you leave, then you leave
And even though I didn't need you
I'm still broken, Wheres the breakthrough?

I thought I didn't need you here
You said you loved, but I wouldn't hear
Now that your gone, I want you back
But you wont come, wont cut any slack

So when I get over you
Finally think I'll make it through
Then you finally want my heart
So now I'm torn, and falling apart

Just go away, your prescence hurts
When you're near, I feel like dirt
You confuse my emotion
As If i'm drowning in an ocean

An ocean of pain, so wide so deep
I cry at night, and cannot sleep
What else is there? This is all I know
And now I must let you go.




Submitted on 2008-09-13 00:30:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a magnificant poem chan, even if it does sting me a little. Every word you chose seemed to fit so perfectly and made it easy for you to say what you wanted to say. Lovely job
| Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
  wow.....I don't have much to say. Don't know what to say to such a poem. Good job seems to low, you deserve so much more than what I could ever say.
I don't think that I have EVER said this to anyone, and if I have, I take it back, THis is the BEST poem, I have read, that touched me, as much as this one did. thank you Soooo much, for writing it.

Grimm reaper
| Posted on 2008-09-30 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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