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    dots Submission Name: Let you godots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 658
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 875



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       Its not true, Fyi... lets not start a fight over another stupid poem... just some thoughts k?


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    dotsLet you godots
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    I knew you werent right for me
    but then you leave, then you leave
    And even though I didn't need you
    I'm still broken, Wheres the breakthrough?

    I thought I didn't need you here
    You said you loved, but I wouldn't hear
    Now that your gone, I want you back
    But you wont come, wont cut any slack

    So when I get over you
    Finally think I'll make it through
    Then you finally want my heart
    So now I'm torn, and falling apart

    Just go away, your prescence hurts
    When you're near, I feel like dirt
    You confuse my emotion
    As If i'm drowning in an ocean

    An ocean of pain, so wide so deep
    I cry at night, and cannot sleep
    What else is there? This is all I know
    And now I must let you go.




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      This is a magnificant poem chan, even if it does sting me a little. Every word you chose seemed to fit so perfectly and made it easy for you to say what you wanted to say. Lovely job
    | Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.....I don't have much to say. Don't know what to say to such a poem. Good job seems to low, you deserve so much more than what I could ever say.
    I don't think that I have EVER said this to anyone, and if I have, I take it back, THis is the BEST poem, I have read, that touched me, as much as this one did. thank you Soooo much, for writing it.

    Grimm reaper
    | Posted on 2008-09-30 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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