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    dots Submission Name: Heavenly Begotten Children pt. 3dots
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    Author: Ceyx
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    dotsHeavenly Begotten Children pt. 3dots
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    Heavenly Begotten Children III: Children of The Sun




    We all lead simple lives.
    Say thee not; I say you lie.
    (No matter the values you apply)
                -Discovered while pre-existing;
    "Primitive social lives with primitive religion..."
    The kind you'd find none of our faith within.
    Exploited classes (masses) for those who knew no exploiting.

    No man could become rich...
                ...no man could become poor.

    An ancient communism.
    *scoffing*
                -"Impracticable and impossible."
    Ceased upon by lustful Christians.
                -Imposed unnatural and abominable...
    Lacking Christ, therefore unstable.

    Praise the All-Beholding Father for this "economic vacuum".
    Pray for those who have no concept of credits, bearing bonds, stocks and mortgages.
                -Pray for those who could not procure a livelihood without performing any "useful works"...
    The Priests of The Sun had prepared no everlasting Hell to frighten them into honesty and virtue.
                -For there was no crime, no vice, until the Christians introduced it.
    No evil until they produced it.

    Behold! The Sun:
    The great luminary and parent of mankind.
                -Who sent two of his children to guide and teach of a life negate of barbarism, war and indiscriminate worship.
    Lead by a beam in the sky to their "Garden of Delight"...
                -Thus the legend of the Incas of Peru.
    Descended from Manco Capac and Mama Oello.
    CHILDREN OF THE SUN.

    Savages.
                -So much different than the children of Eve, no?
    The children of a God, teaching enlightenment, signaled by a light in the sky, told to build an "Eden" for their people...
    ...So much the scorn.
    They need be reborn!
    For these "primitives" performed an occasional WILLING human sacrifice.
                -Jesus was a willing human sacrifice to YOUR God!
    The more things change- the more they stay the same.
    The more something is similar the more they need proclaim:
    "Unless ye REPENT ye shall likewise perish."
          -Watch as they throw your scripture to the floor- you call this an act of war?

    Place your leader upon their throne-

    Conversion unacceptable-

    PREACH!

    Children of The Sun ---



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      this isnt as strong as the other two. nor as long or scathing. but it did bring up a coupla interesting points for me.

    one was about willing human sacrifice.
    this is prolly gonna sound stupid but ive never thought how christs death echoes other 'religious' ideas in that way...
    ive had indepth conversations about the crusades and how wrong they were and how the church is always corrupt when it has power but ive never thought of the mimicry of fundamental christian truths. we're always conditioned to think that christ was amazing in his sacrifice [and i am not saying he isnt because i live my life for him] but i never gave much thought to there being any connection at all to "pagan rituals"... you know?

    yes... i have really enjoyed this series.
    you have caused me to think a whole lot about what i believe and why. i doubt many other christians would be able to read it and be moved to think though because the first two were especially pointed and sharp and they'd have flown into defence mode.

    im gonna stop there
    im quite sad the series is over.
    | Posted on 2008-09-13 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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