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    dots Submission Name: Eternal lovedots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 659
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    Description:
       Well itís a long time since I wrote a poem and this is something which I did not want to rhyme but unfortunately two words do. The concept of the poem is me waiting to be loved by a dream. A woman is a dream that comes true in a manís life. Some like me are meant to live alone so I cannot help it. I cry every day. I proposed many and I said no to one that I liked. My dreams meant more than her. That is not what I regret though. Itís me thought in life as a role in this human soul
    that says moreÖ.
    And the world says dieÖ


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    dotsEternal lovedots
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    Dreams that I cry with,
    a life that I live with regrets,
    A thought of why do I live,
    love that says, dieÖ.
    Stall my heart of stone
    to melt and yet be frozen,
    Pain is all that I feel in this dreadful world of mine.

    A dream that never came true,
    the truth that just was a dream,
    Life that asks for purpose,
    the world says, dieÖ
    A thought that life is meant for,
    a wish in death to live,
    Maya is all that I dream for, a dream so divine.




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