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    dots Submission Name: Live Tonight (disfunctional reality)dots
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    Author: panzyrocker
    ASL Info:    15/m/On
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 53/85/67
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLive Tonight (disfunctional reality)dots
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    Live tonight i dream this crowd,
    throwing stones a bloody mess,
    a crown of thorns and path of nails,
    the forsaken future of this breed,
    and the forgetful word,
    never to be forgotten.

    The loss of hope in time of doubt,
    falling pedals in pools of blood,
    tears of ash falling from the sky,
    an earth quake pounding in my head,
    the inner soul (world in my heart).

    Failed creation an altered sacrafice,
    sitting alone a wound in my side,
    the blood i bleed burns the ground,
    the world inside set a blaze,
    the light inside the dark.

    From this dream of dread and fear,
    i lose my mind and lose myself,
    kicking and flailing turning to dust,
    a monster in the mirror above,
    a monster which is my master,
    and me the slave controlled by string.

    Live tonight i dream this crowd,
    throwing stones a bloody mess,
    crown of thorns and path of nails,
    a dream dreamt of fear and doubt,
    a disfunctional reality.




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