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    dots Submission Name: Owlbanditodots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 809
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    dotsOwlbanditodots
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    Weekends closing in
    And we're about to get
    What we long deserve.
    Hit the door running,
    People don't create a path
    And we have no time for that.
    Make the heavens take notice
    And Hell we're havin fun.

    Just waiting for dusk
    Hands smothered dirty.
    We ain't never been pretty.
    Blazing to the highway,
    Searching all the inlands
    For a place to wash our hands.
    Don't let up till dawn,
    We got the devil on the run.

    "Love's gonna have to wait!!!"
    Complaining of us being a crowd,
    As we shout our chant out loud.
    Take in another round of beers,
    Dodging that fat boy cupid.
    We're about to do something stupid
    Or something wiser than our years.
    Make the heavens take notice
    And Hell we're havin fun.
    Don't let up till dawn,
    We got the devil on the run.




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      I read a lot of your poems in one go. The writing style is so compelling.

    I must say - your expressions mean a lot. And they are beautiful - they just float. Albeit, their are some hiccups once or twice, but the hiccups add by becoming wings thereon.

    I cant comment on any one line or piece as I am so much intrigued by all that I've read.

    I chose this one because I felt kind of strange that this piece ... having a three line/part alliteration - like one of your other poems I read ... has no comments ... It's so difficult to even try .. let alone bring it as beautifully as you do

    Cheers ...
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]


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