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    dots Submission Name: My Paraplegic love Pt. 3dots

    Author: geekyslacker
    ASL Info:    28/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 64/41/14
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMy Paraplegic love Pt. 3dots

    Extinguish the flame that burned for a decade.

    You are a dream never come true.

    Don't ask whether the light would have been
    shared, because I no longer wait.

    This obsession bore no sweet fruit.

    I see clearly that we are futile.

    Mark me a coward for letting go.

    You can never say that you weren't thought of
    this way.

    Submitted on 2008-09-14 02:34:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is my favorite of the three.
    Time is a very powerful concept in poetry which you seem to use frequently, But I feel it was used most superbly in the opeing of this poem.

    "Extinguish the flame that burned for a decade....you are adream that never came true."

    That conjures up feelings of pain and unrequited love that almost anyone can relate to.
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by nolram | [ Reply to This ]
      here that. Buster has an ingeniuos plan so dont let go yet. and me and gun also have a plan . (=
    | Posted on 2008-11-18 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
       Wow this is really intense. I hope everything goes ok with the whole problem. It so sad, but in the end its when people are sad when they write there best! I really think that you have an amazing talent and you could go very far with it.
    "You are a dream never come true."
    that line just got me, to think that many people think that dreams come true and then they strive for it but it barley happens.... dreams... the thing that gets people to stop what there doing and jump into action...

    "This obsession bore no sweet fruit."
    Oh and the tree of love has not lived to see its end....


    | Posted on 2008-11-05 00:00:00 | by LighterFluid | [ Reply to This ]
      nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo dont let go just yet, were almost there i have an ingenious plan!

    but other that you letting go, the poem was written most excellently. u seriously have the stuff fo a poet like an amazing one (=

    i like the analogies and the sad ending. keep up the stunning work


    poor Mr. Vrooom Vroom
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      go on with ur bad self.

    this poem is wicked.(=
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Woohoo...finally out that wrld...proud of u 4 makin' such a (not drastic buh) wise decision!!!....i love this one...it really suits the last 2!!!....
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by Jaiknob | [ Reply to This ]

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