[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: My Paraplegic love Pt. 3dots

    Author: geekyslacker
    ASL Info:    28/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 64/41/14
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 916
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 528

       This is the end of that.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMy Paraplegic love Pt. 3dots

    Extinguish the flame that burned for a decade.

    You are a dream never come true.

    Don't ask whether the light would have been
    shared, because I no longer wait.

    This obsession bore no sweet fruit.

    I see clearly that we are futile.

    Mark me a coward for letting go.

    You can never say that you weren't thought of
    this way.

    Submitted on 2008-09-14 02:34:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      This is my favorite of the three.
    Time is a very powerful concept in poetry which you seem to use frequently, But I feel it was used most superbly in the opeing of this poem.

    "Extinguish the flame that burned for a decade....you are adream that never came true."

    That conjures up feelings of pain and unrequited love that almost anyone can relate to.
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by nolram | [ Reply to This ]
      here that. Buster has an ingeniuos plan so dont let go yet. and me and gun also have a plan . (=
    | Posted on 2008-11-18 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
       Wow this is really intense. I hope everything goes ok with the whole problem. It so sad, but in the end its when people are sad when they write there best! I really think that you have an amazing talent and you could go very far with it.
    "You are a dream never come true."
    that line just got me, to think that many people think that dreams come true and then they strive for it but it barley happens.... dreams... the thing that gets people to stop what there doing and jump into action...

    "This obsession bore no sweet fruit."
    Oh and the tree of love has not lived to see its end....


    | Posted on 2008-11-05 00:00:00 | by LighterFluid | [ Reply to This ]
      nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo dont let go just yet, were almost there i have an ingenious plan!

    but other that you letting go, the poem was written most excellently. u seriously have the stuff fo a poet like an amazing one (=

    i like the analogies and the sad ending. keep up the stunning work


    poor Mr. Vrooom Vroom
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      go on with ur bad self.

    this poem is wicked.(=
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Woohoo...finally out that wrld...proud of u 4 makin' such a (not drastic buh) wise decision!!!....i love this one...it really suits the last 2!!!....
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by Jaiknob | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    This written by Chelebel
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    To written by SavedDragon
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    The Promise written by annie0888
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]