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    dots Submission Name: varnishdots
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    Author: discombobulated
    ASL Info:    26/m/nz
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 81/63/24
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Prose/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 814
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    Bytes: 944



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    dotsvarnishdots
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    strange it is this knowing you
    to hold onto mountains

    as if the absolute carried
    final truth.

    you'll find me, buried beneath comets.
    gasp and wonder at why misfortune
    crawls up our spines. seethe and journey
    within words and paintings. these reflections
    seem far more real

    than the vocal imaginings
    within the comfort of this room.

    we were foetal once, an enclosed cosmos.
    burst and shatter, frail anger
    at what-if's
    and dreams ground
    into soft grey
    powder.

    this taste of iron will never compare
    to the drag of dandelion crowns

    floating, floating:
    orbs of whispered
    content.

    restless, restless:
    a spiral figure
    eight.

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    Submitted on 2008-09-14 11:27:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Am I getting infinity?
    I like this. I'm not sure if I quite understand all of it throughout. BUt if you would like to tell me one day what you were going for I would be pleased to hear it. :)
    | Posted on 2008-09-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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