Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: My Girldots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Blackphoenix14
    ASL Info:    16/male/AR
    Elite Ratio:    1.56 - 20/64/51
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Love
    Total Views: 169
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1063



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMy Girldots
    -------------------------------------------


    The curve of your hips
    Is stuck in my mind
    The taste of your lips
    So sweet that I find
    Myself lost in the thought
    Of our next embrace
    I see now I'm caught
    Without even a chase


    My eyes light up when you enter a room
    I smile when we are together
    No matter how bad things are
    You always make them better


    I love you for your loving smile
    With which my old heart soars
    These are some of the reasons
    Every second beat is yours


    Every time I see your face and
    Every time you smile
    Every time I kiss your lips
    My love grows all the while


    You might never know
    Just how truly special you are
    That even on the darkest nights
    You are my brightest star


    If a king can have his throne
    And if a bird can have his Spring nest
    And God can have his heaven
    Then I, my sweetheart, I can have you





    Submitted on 2008-09-14 23:33:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      


    Ah, a very lovely write. I find myself very happy that there is still some hope yet in the vast world that seems so bleak with it's empty promises. A very beautiful poem, that in the days of Shakespear and nights, would have won the hand of a fair maiden!
    | Posted on 2008-09-16 00:00:00 | by augustcranes | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool. I am impressed.
    I wish my BF wrote something like that.
    -.-
    | Posted on 2008-09-16 00:00:00 | by MizzyInNevaland | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    165708



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry