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    dots Submission Name: Based Off A True Storydots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       no at the end i am not saying i am undeniable, just that i try to write without prohibtion.... or freely

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    dotsBased Off A True Storydots

    Letís start from the beginning...
    He was just a skinny kid,
    Donít mind his heart, though
    He just had it jimmy rigged
    If anything, he mustíve resented it
    Love always on his mind
    He just never mentioned it,
    Never meant, though,
    Just got a slow mouth,
    Atleast his heartís brave enough,
    To let himself go south,
    Or hold out,
    tilí tears start to soak, glisten,
    mind says no, but my heart,
    just wonít listen,
    worst part is,
    it was like a daydream,
    wake up with the same needs,
    take a picture say cheese,
    smiles fake, faÁade,
    while heís jaded,
    eyes covered up,
    like he just got lasik,
    Bandaged up for two weeks,
    Manning up, Do he
    Cry himself to sleep?Ö

    He's the Cryist-
    Defiant- yet reliable,
    despite the bull, the kid
    writes like he's undeniable

    Submitted on 2008-09-15 03:31:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like who you're describing here. It reminds me of a few people whom also write. Verbal throw-up comes out of their mind, and they always say it's bad but I tell them "KEEP WRITING" because for some reason when they do I feel like keeping up with my own hobby, too. Why is that? I don't know.
    As far as being improved, I can't really say. I don't usually tell people to format differantly but I ponder if this would be easier to read broken up rather than in a blob. Really dosen't matter though.
    | Posted on 2008-09-15 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]

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