The Howling Winds by MmR

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Author:	MmR
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The Howling Winds dots

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…and through the howling nights wind
You never heard me say I love you…
I only wish I had said it sooner

Maybe I took you for granted
And maybe it seemed as though I didn’t care…
Maybe I just couldn’t find my way
To open up and share.
You were more than just my friend
And I hope that you had seen,
You were more than “like a brother”
You were my family.

…I only wish I had said it sooner,
Before the howling wind…

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  beautiful piece. I love you words. "the howling wind".
This speaks the regret of not showing your feelings simply and makes me want to go and spill my guts and open up to some people I know.
| Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
  A wonderful piece of work full of image.

And I think I know what this relates to and I do not feel as if it cliché as you once said you where afraid of if you wrote anything right now.

Peace
| Posted on 2008-12-21 00:00:00 | by spoonfedprop | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this piece, actually i stumbled upon it by accident and decided to read it. The curiosity was too strong, I'm weak in that sense. Its funny because I had just had a conversation about something similar, about love and not saying it.

I like how it starts off like a thought, out of the blue, out of nowhere for everyone else but its a line that's familiar to you...

…and through the howling nights wind
You never heard me say I love you…

something you might have told yourself over and over before, and finally said it out loud. But I disagree, I dont think it was just too general and not specific about the reasons why you miss them or what you miss about them.

It was a very short piece that explained what you wanted to say, add more and the meaning that youre trying to convey would be lost, but then that is only my opinion.

Maybe I just couldn’t find my way
To open up and share.

I like this line, mostly because its something I can relate to. I've never had any problems really expressing my feelings and showing them to others but I have been on the other side of that equation. I know the frustration of seeing an indifference from the other person. This is something I would hope to hear from them,

anywho.... I loved how you enclosed your feelings in what I think were your thoughts.... and when I say this I mean the howling wind bit.... it might have been the line that brought about the poem... I dont know... again just making assumptions

Andrea
| Posted on 2008-11-19 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  I think the poem started out really strong with a cautionary or bleak tone, wondering if the wind is metaphorical or literal.

The emotion was carried strong through the rest of the poem. The only thing, for me, i think would have made it better is if you elaborated more on the body such as specific instances that make you miss this person as opposed to just saying that you miss them. Bring us into your world. Dig deeper!

Great start with lots of potential though.

~Musing
| Posted on 2008-09-16 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the image you have used with the howling wind and lost love, as if the wind itself was what carried those words away from the ears of the one who was meant to hear it.. Beautifully written..
| Posted on 2008-09-15 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]

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