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    dots Submission Name: softer touchingsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotssofter touchingsdots
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    another sound forms,
    vital in seamless vestments
    composed from air
    & tart to the taste
    on the tongue
    that flings it's perfect sweetness
    towards your own.

    & i've made my way
    through what's seemed
    like endless distances
    to arrive here,
    again
    & to wonder
    if everything
    merely repeats
    like the conversations
    in my heart?

    will even this,
    this discussion
    that we've had
    in silence,
    somehow become inaudible
    with time?

    sometimes i use my words
    to create fevers
    where the heat
    should be.
    i take the green
    from leaves
    with trembling fingers
    & place the colours
    on your skin
    for softer touching.

    & you seem
    more fragile
    when your pushing
    things away.
    it's as if
    you think
    that you might just shatter
    if you let yourself
    be filled again.

    it's like we're dangling
    from the same cliff,
    but yet we know
    that we can never
    really fall again.
    & it's so strange
    to be alive
    & always waiting
    for gravity
    to change our minds.




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