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When the Waters Rise

Author: MusingMinstrel
ASL Info:    26/Male/Chicago
Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 744 /744 /128
Words: 330
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
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When the Waters Rise

I went into church
Got on my knees and prayed
Patiently waited for my God
And listened for what He had to say
Pass the plate twice, budget adjust
Attendance is at an all time low
But there is no blame except
The one you dont accept as your own

The deacon died yesterday
While the prayer groups who would meet
And pray in Gods will to heal while
Cirrhosis, like the bottle, played for keeps
But I never shed a tear for the dead
Nor do I ever pray in Gods will
Or expect a miracle to come for those who
Will do just as they feel

So Ill take a train
If it leaves today
And I wont ask for nothing
But for me to be on my way
For Ive come such a long, long way
And Ive still got a ways to go
Im taking every turn and twist
Through the forks and backroads

I'll fall asleep and dream
On the flatbed of a railroad car
And keep warm when Im
Covered by a blanket of stars
I'll hear a voice in the stillness of the wind
Not when they rise and fall
And not to be criticized for what I believe
By those who believe in nothing at all

For some twenty years
Chicago has been my home
Even with 10 million people
I still felt alone
Ill be the one to play the role
See that there's no moss on this stone
Or feel guilty for wanting to see
Something more than what I am shown

When the waters rise
Ill be leaving this here town
And see a stranger coming and tell him
If youre smart youll turn around
And Ill shake his hand like a friend
And leave while wishing him luck
And he wishes I could only see
That you have to build from the ground up

Submitted on 2008-09-16 05:49:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this song feels really full.
like youre trying to tell me a million things both bluntly and between lines.
i know im not following them all.
but what i see i like.

crazy how you can be surrounded by so many people and yet feel alone [in a purely non-emo/angst kinda way]
example: i am crazy active in my church. some days i wonder whether i am the glue holding it together. and yet i feel completely disconnected from the people. mostly people talk to me because they want me to do something or want to know something. there doesnt seem to bemuch personal interest in me as a person which leaves me feeling isolated, used and disconnected. if it wasnt for god i wouldnt be there...

i like that you say 'my god' in the first verse. i'll always remember a convo i had with this old scottish man. he was very drunk this one night and we got to talking about god and why i went to church and why he didnt and he said that the best sign off note he ever read was "may your god bless you"
kinda like in desiderata when he says something about finding peace with god whatever you find god to be...
yeah. i guess youre not forcing your religious stance on others and i respect that.

i really like the third verse. it seems to say so much and the warm blanket of stars is a gorgeous image

when the waters rise you gotta get out... kinda hope god told you to build an "ark" before hand... something about his favour...
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This is kind of cool. I like the flow of this piece, it's kind of different. The speaker has an almost world-weary tone, like resignation or acceptance, but at the same time, a kind of dry sense of speaking that catches your eye.

I found this poem kind of unusual, and mildly difficult to follow, but that is where the best poetry comes from, no?

i can't think of any changes I would make; i think any changes to it would destroy the integrity of the poem.

Keep writing, i hope to see more in the future.

| Posted on 2008-09-16 00:00:00 | by CourtneyLynne | [ Reply to This ]

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