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    dots Submission Name: Heaven Can Waitdots

    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHeaven Can Waitdots

    I see you laughing.
    Your smile makes you glow
    If this is really you then heaven can wait.
    Iím not ready to go.

    Your skin is so fair, perfect,
    like the clouds in the sky.
    Leave it all behind? I wouldnít dare try.
    Heaven can wait, and thatís no lie.

    You shine just like the stars
    Except, youíre brighter in the light.
    If this is really you then heaven can wait
    Thereís no prettier sight.

    They say heaven is a perfect place
    Somewhere up there, is a land full of grace
    I say as long as I can see your beautiful face
    Heaven can wait

    Itís you Iíll embrace.

    You see, there is no heaven without your love
    Just a piece of the puzzle, just a place high above.

    And if it takes more than a lifetime to make this dream come true
    Heaven can wait until Iíve finished loving you.

    Submitted on 2008-09-16 06:29:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this..it reminds me of the movie "heaven can wait"--

    when he finds out he is going to die...and now he loves a woman and wants to back out of his deal...he wants to experience life with her...

    it seems so unfair to find that love just before the end...or to not have found it during this lifetime...

    we become so cynical thinking love has evaded us...and not caring if we live or die...and then she comes along...and suddenly life seems so precious...and heaven a far away thing that we want to keep far away.
    | Posted on 2011-03-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is absolutely magnificent! I've been reading up on alot of love poetry, though nothing has quite compared to this. I like how you made love sort of cynical. Saying "heaven can wait," after you describe her. It's almost as if you were ready to call life quits when she came to you, but she changed that. This is a beautiful piece, Kudos!
    Beautiful yet, Corrupted
    | Posted on 2008-09-17 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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